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Re: Preview article about this year's squad!
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Nice article. I don't agree with how you framed Holt's season, but I think you put time and effort into this.
If you are really looking for input, I would say this ... sincerely and honestly ... work on your writing. You have talent and effort, but you've must put time and reps into the basics. I've littered hundreds of posts here with typos and things that I didn't proof read, so I'm not the ideal person to make this point. But there are a lot of little mistakes in the piece you can fix with good edit and proofing work. You writing structure needs work generally. Moreover, a piece of this nature and length should primarily stick to a sentence structure that has an nice simple flow.
A lot of folks your age are focusing on "What I said," and the work needs to go into "How you said it."
I typically wouldn't go there with somebody your age, but you asked for input. Good luck. Look forward to reading you in the future.
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